Before my next draft, I plan on making my essay flow and changing around a lot of paragraphs.
My feedback helped me a lot in realizing how I needed to order my essay. I wasn't sure exactly where I was headed at first, but now, after reading other essays and my feedback, I know what to do. I am going to compare and contrast my two movies in the same paragraph instead of in separate ones.
I am definitely taking all of their feedback. They praised me for my grammar and my wording, which I try very hard on, which made me smile. Also, they told me to create more solid main points to introduce my topics and keep the reader on track. Danielle told me to focus on certain thing's rather than some items I have in my essay, as well as to compare side by side. Also, I did not include anything about the second movie yet so I know I still need to do that.
None of their feedback was unclear.
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